Oscar's Words Alive Writing

The Kit Kat group worked hard to edit Oscar's writing last week. We focussed on choosing strong adjectives to describe nouns. Here is the finished piece:

I was diving in the rough but precious coral. There was a school of colourful, stripy and spotted fish, darting between murky green seaweed. Shiny, grey dolphins squeaked loudly to each other. Gigantic Manta Rays were gliding along the surface then I looked down. There were two dark shadows as black as bats swimming quickly towards a group of pink seahorses. They swam away. The two shadows were freaky White Tipped Reef sharks.
By Oscar