Today in the Moro's Words Alive group we worked with the teacher to make Kahu's writing even better than it already was. We focussed on varying our sentence beginnings, sampling misspelt words and including strong adjectives in our writing. Here is the finished product:
I slowly tip-toed up the overgrown footpath. An owl hooted then I found myself right next to a haunted house! I saw a goblin, I turned back then it was gone. I was terrified. I heard a screech. It came from inside the house! All of a sudden I knew I had to do something. I barged in the door when I heard a screeching laugh. The door locked up. After that I knew this was a horrible place to be. A shiver sped up my spine, then a goblin attacked me!
By Kahu
I slowly tip-toed up the overgrown footpath. An owl hooted then I found myself right next to a haunted house! I saw a goblin, I turned back then it was gone. I was terrified. I heard a screech. It came from inside the house! All of a sudden I knew I had to do something. I barged in the door when I heard a screeching laugh. The door locked up. After that I knew this was a horrible place to be. A shiver sped up my spine, then a goblin attacked me!
By Kahu
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